This is where you will post a picture of yourself, a brief description of who you are, and upload your essay.
The begging is good, though I don't think you should put that you live there in the paper, maybe say something like In the small town of Gibbon. Also, starting with small towns, seems like it would be more of a title.
Good thesis statement, although you didn't state the reasons why after it.
Transition words are good, just dint forget the coma.
Topic sentences are good, tells me what the paragraph is going to be about.
Could expand on the various programs they have by including how they improve the community. Plus you could mention what would happen on Holidays, like what activities would go on. you could say that it would be a good place for the community to come together and become closer?
Good concluding thesis, though, you did not talk about keeping students out of trouble in body paragraphs.
You didn't summarize your conclusion, it was only one sentence.
Did not have a smooth ending. Should always leave your reader thinking. Could have said "So why not bring a YMCA to Gibbon" and plug in your three main points to it.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.