This is where you will post a picture of yourself, a brief description of who you are, and upload your essay.
One strength that I found was that your topic was very relatable. A couple things that I think you could work on are a clearer thesis statement, using more transitions, and give a few more examples and reasonings behind your points to create added length and clarity. Your paper has great value already, but one more idea that would get your paper to the next step would be using a thesaurus to give it some upper level wording. The fact that you used a counter-argument really helps your paper.
Write something about yourself. No need to be fancy, just an overview.